Um. This is my first DD. Ever. A bazillion thanks for all the comments and faves! And Super-Thanks to ^nycterent
, one of the most awesome writers here on dA.
. A poetic monologue.
Critique please! It's a rough draft. I might turn it into part of a longer piece.
For those of you who are actors, do you think this could really be interpreted/read onstage? I was trying to avoid poetry-slam-ness by making it about a specific situation. Did it work?
EDIT: I know this is late, but I realize there's been some confusion as to the interpretation of this piece. I just want to make it clear that Claude has already read this letter and gone over it multiple times. What Claude says during the monologue is not the literal words of the letter sent by the state, but rather what he hears in his mind when he reads the letter.
I hope that clears up some confusion!
As with most of my scripts, feel free to use for a drama class or produce or whatever, just let me know
. For this one in particular, again, it's a rough draft, so you might want to try and find something more finished.